Describe a time when your friend damaged something you owned.: IELTS Speaking Cue Card

The response begins with 'Yeah,' which is informal for the IELTS speaking test.

Start with a more formal introduction such as 'I remember an incident that occurred about 5 to 6 years ago.'

Repetition of words like 'favourite' and 'bat.'

Use synonyms or paraphrase to avoid repetition. For example, instead of 'favourite,' you could use 'cherished' or 'beloved.'

Incorrect article usage in 'the brand was also very Nike.'

Use 'the brand was Nike,' as 'very' is unnecessary here.

Overuse of 'like' and informal expressions.

Replace 'like' with more formal connectors such as 'for instance' or 'for example.'

Use of 'pay back me the money' which is awkward.

Rephrase as 'compensate me for the bat' or 'buy me a replacement.'

Sentence structures are somewhat fragmented and lack cohesion.

Use cohesive devices to improve flow, such as 'Firstly,' 'As a result,' and 'Nevertheless.'

Incorrect use of singular/plural form in 'One of my friend'.

Use 'One of my friends' to correctly indicate that you have multiple friends.

Repetition of ideas and lack of coherence in the sentence structure.

Try to organize your ideas more logically. For example, start with the event, then describe your feelings, and conclude with your decision to forgive.

Overuse of the word 'so' and simple connectors.

Use a variety of connectors like 'therefore,' 'however,' or 'as a result' to improve the flow of your response.

Incorrect tense usage in 'Even though I am disappointed'.

Use the past tense 'Even though I was disappointed' to match the past context of the story.

Awkward phrasing in 'Also conveyed her apology to me.'

Rephrase it to 'She also apologized to me,' which is clearer and more natural.

There are multiple instances of grammatical errors, such as 'a parts' instead of 'into parts', 'didn't meant' instead of 'didn't mean', and 'febble' which seems to be a misspelling of 'feeble'.

Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct word forms. For example, use 'into parts' and 'didn't mean'. Double-check spelling to avoid errors like 'febble'.

The use of 'yeah' at the beginning of the response and later in the narrative can be informal and less appropriate for IELTS.

Try to avoid informal words like 'yeah'. Instead, use more formal expressions such as 'Indeed' or 'Certainly'.

The narrative lacks cohesive devices and transitions, leading to a somewhat disjointed flow.

Incorporate cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'As a result' to structure the story better and improve the flow.

Repetition of phrases such as 'I didn't react' and 'everyone was looking'.

Avoid repetition by using synonyms or rephrasing. For example, instead of repeating 'I didn't react', you could say, 'I remained calm'.

Repetition of the phrase 'my vehicle' and 'motorcycle.'

Try to use synonyms or paraphrase to avoid repetition. For example, 'my bike' or 'two-wheeler.'

Use of 'telling' instead of 'telling me.'

It would be more grammatically correct to say 'telling me' instead of just 'telling.'

Incorrect tense usage in 'I get a message.'

Ensure consistent past tense usage by saying 'I got a message.'

Overuse of 'had' in past perfect tense.

The past perfect tense is used excessively. Use simple past tense where possible, such as 'I gave him the vehicle.'

Lack of cohesive devices.

Incorporate connectors like 'However,' 'Therefore,' and 'In addition' to improve the flow of the narrative.

Use of 'friend' instead of 'friends' in 'one of my friend.'

Use 'friends' instead of 'friend' to correctly use the phrase 'one of my friends.'

Incorrect tense usage in 'She takes from me to listen music.'

Use past tense: 'She took them from me to listen to music.'

Incorrect use of 'wantedly.'

Use 'intentionally' instead of 'wantedly.'

Incorrect use of 'fall down' and 'are like broken.'

Use 'fell down' and 'were broken.'

Repetition of 'earpods' and incorrect use of 'are' instead of 'were.'

Use 'my earpods were very important to me' and avoid repetition.

Incorrect phrase 'apologize me.'

Use 'apologized to me.'

Overuse of 'so' and lack of cohesive devices.

Use cohesive devices like 'Moreover,' 'However,' and 'Therefore' to improve flow.

Lack of descriptive vocabulary.

Incorporate more descriptive vocabulary such as 'cherished,' 'inadvertently,' or 'significant.'

Repetition of 'playing with a basketball' and 'glass mug'.

Try to use synonyms or paraphrase to avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeating 'playing with a basketball', you could say 'engaging in an indoor game with a basketball'. For 'glass mug', you could use 'glass cup' or 'mug made of glass'.

Use of 'And' at the beginning of sentences multiple times.

Consider using more varied connectors like 'Additionally', 'Furthermore', or 'Moreover' to improve the flow and cohesion of your story.

Use of present tense 'it's a funny story' when referring to a past event.

Maintain consistency in tense. You could say 'it was a funny story' to keep it in the past tense.

The phrase 'it flew in the air and was crushed on the ground' could be more descriptive.

Enhance your description by saying 'it soared through the air before shattering upon hitting the ground'.

The phrase 'a little electronical' is incorrect. 'Electronical' is not a standard English word.

Use 'electronic' instead of 'electronical' to correctly describe the pencil box.

The sentence 'I was really sad on that' has incorrect preposition usage.

Use 'sad about that' instead of 'sad on that' for correct preposition usage.

The phrase 'It's a whole part of the life' is awkward and unclear.

Replace it with 'It's all part of life' to make the expression more natural.

The phrase 'pencil box case situation' is repetitive and awkward.

Use 'incident with the pencil box' instead to avoid repetition and awkwardness.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement in 'One of my friend damaged my thing.'

Use 'friends' instead of 'friend' to match the subject with the verb, as in 'One of my friends damaged something I owned.'

Incorrect use of past tense in 'The bat brought from my father.'

Use 'was brought' to correctly form the past passive, as in 'The bat was brought by my father.'

Repetitive and unclear sentence structure.

Use varied sentence structures and cohesive devices to improve clarity and flow. For example, 'I received this bat as a birthday gift from my father when I turned 18. It was quite expensive, costing over Rs. 1500, and I cherished it deeply.'

Lack of coherence and logical flow.

Organize the narrative using a structured approach, such as starting with the context, describing the event, and then reflecting on the impact. For instance, 'Back in 1957, my best friend accidentally damaged a precious bat that my father had gifted me on my 18th birthday. Although it was costly, its sentimental value was far greater. Despite the incident, I chose to remain calm, as our friendship was more important to me.'

Incorrect use of articles and pronouns.

Ensure correct use of articles and pronouns. For example, 'He is the best friend' should be 'He is my best friend.'

The response lacks coherence and relevance to the question asked. It does not describe a specific incident where a friend damaged something you owned.

Focus on a specific event where a friend damaged your possession. Use the 5W+1H method to structure your answer: What happened, when it happened, where it took place, why it was important, who was involved, and how it was resolved.

There is repetition of the word 'cure' and unclear use of 'technology' in the context of repairing a product.

Instead of 'cure,' use 'repair' or 'fix.' Ensure that the vocabulary used is appropriate for the context. For example, if discussing how to repair something, mention specific tools or methods.

The response lacks descriptive vocabulary and cohesive devices.

Incorporate descriptive words and expressions to enhance the narrative. Use cohesive devices like 'First of all,' 'Moreover,' and 'As a result' to improve the flow of your response.

The sentence structure is confusing and lacks coherence, especially in phrases like 'I never often because she reuned but I would like but I really lost my few time because of she spilled water on my notes.'

Try to structure your sentences more clearly. You can use cohesive devices like 'However,' 'Unfortunately,' or 'As a result,' to connect your ideas more logically. For example, 'Although I was upset because she ruined my notes, I tried not to show it because she is my friend. Unfortunately, I lost valuable study time as she spilled water on them.'

The phrase 'I really feel often but I never tell her' is unclear and awkward.

Clarify your emotions and actions. You might say, 'I often felt upset, but I chose not to tell her because she is my friend.'

Use of incorrect tense and awkward phrasing in 'because of she spilled water on my notes.'

Use the correct tense and phrasing. You could say, 'because she spilled water on my notes.'

Repetition and lack of clarity in 'Even I have to, I need to.'

Avoid repetition and ensure clarity. You might say, 'I had to accept the situation and move on.'