Describe a time when you were in line for a long time.: IELTS Speaking Cue Card

The phrase 'stood up in a line' is awkward. 'Stood in line' or 'waited in line' would be more appropriate.

Use 'stood in line' or 'waited in line' to convey the idea of waiting in a queue.

The sentence 'We went there, people usually get to Tirupati and start their walk towards the main pilgrim which is Lord Venkateshwara temple' is unclear and lacks coherence.

Rephrase the sentence for clarity: 'We went there, and like most visitors, we started our walk towards the main pilgrimage site, the Lord Venkateshwara temple.'

The phrase 'as usually' is incorrect.

Replace 'as usually' with 'as usual.'

Repetition of 'suffering and pain' and 'suffering and exhaustion' reduces the impact of the description.

Use varied vocabulary to describe the experience, such as 'discomfort and fatigue' or 'strain and exhaustion.'

The sentence 'So I think that's the time when, but I felt very relieved after that' is disjointed.

Rephrase for coherence: 'I think that's the time when I felt most relieved, especially after resting in the hotel room my father booked for us.'

Overuse of simple connectors like 'so' and 'and,' leading to a lack of variety in sentence structure.

Try using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'however,' 'therefore,' 'meanwhile,' or 'consequently' to enhance the flow and coherence of your response.

Repetitive use of the phrase 'I thought' and 'going on and on and on.'

Consider paraphrasing or using synonyms to avoid repetition. For example, instead of 'I thought,' you could say 'I assumed' or 'I believed.'

Incorrect use of tense, such as 'I reached the venue a bit late to be honest.'

Ensure consistency in tense. You could say, 'I had reached the venue a bit late, to be honest.'

Awkward phrasing, such as 'my legs were cramping like hell.'

Use more formal expressions, like 'my legs were extremely cramped,' to maintain a suitable tone.

Lack of structured storytelling and descriptive vocabulary.

Start with a brief introduction, describe the situation using vivid language, and conclude with personal reflections. Use words like 'exhausting,' 'unbearably hot,' or 'frustratingly long' to add depth.

The response lacks clear structure and coherence. It jumps between ideas without clear transitions.

Try to organize the response by starting with the background of the situation, describing the experience in sequence, and concluding with reflections or outcomes. Use cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'Moreover,' and 'Finally' to guide the listener through your story.

There is a repetition of phrases and words, such as 'deposit my money' and 'Monday morning.'

Avoid repetition by paraphrasing. For example, instead of repeating 'deposit my money,' you could say 'put funds into my account.'

Incorrect use of indefinite articles and subject-verb agreement, such as 'a situation where I had to stand a long time' and 'it was a petrified.'

Use 'a long time' instead of 'stand a long time' and 'it was petrifying' instead of 'it was a petrified.' Ensure subject-verb agreement is consistent throughout.

The response contains run-on sentences, making it difficult to follow.

Break down long sentences into smaller, more manageable ones. This will help improve clarity and make the response easier to follow.

Some vocabulary choices are inappropriate, such as 'baking hot' and 'petrified.'

Use more appropriate vocabulary for the context. For example, 'scorching hot' could replace 'baking hot' and 'overwhelmed' could replace 'petrified.'

The phrase 'I want to discuss about' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'I want to discuss.'

Remove 'about' to correct the phrase.

The repetition of 'passport' and 'revolution' is unnecessary and makes the sentence unclear.

Avoid repeating words unnecessarily to maintain clarity.

The sentence 'there are many people's to visit that office' contains a grammatical error with 'people's.'

Use 'people' instead of 'people's' for the correct plural form.

The sentence structure is fragmented and lacks cohesion.

Use cohesive devices like 'first,' 'then,' and 'finally' to improve the flow of the narrative.

Incorrect use of tense in 'that's to take that take too much time.'

Use past tense consistently: 'that took too much time.'

The phrase 'I disturb a lot' is awkward and unclear.

Use 'I was very frustrated' to convey the emotion more clearly.