Describe your first school bag.: IELTS Speaking Cue Card

The phrase 'yellow in color' can be simplified to 'yellow.'

Use 'yellow' instead of 'yellow in color' for conciseness.

The phrase 'I do not remember the cartoon name specifically which I used to watch' is slightly awkward.

Consider rephrasing to 'I can't specifically recall the name of the cartoon I used to watch.'

The sentence 'And as my father used to be away from home for business trips and all, it just used to remind me of him and I used to feel very nice about it' is slightly informal.

Rephrase to 'Since my father often traveled for business, the bag reminded me of him and brought me comfort.'

The phrase 'I used to just carry that bag everywhere I go, not only while going to the school' could use a clearer structure.

Rephrase to 'I would carry that bag everywhere I went, not just to school.'

The sentence is a run-on sentence without proper punctuation.

Break the sentence into smaller sentences using periods or commas. For example, 'I still remember I got my first backpack when I was in kindergarten. It was gifted to me by my father.'

Repetition of the word 'backpack.'

Use synonyms or pronouns to avoid repetition. For example, 'I particularly liked the theme of it as it had a cartoon animated picture.'

Incorrect use of 'trip and tourism purposes.'

Use 'for trips and outings' instead, which is more appropriate in this context.

Lack of cohesive devices.

Use cohesive devices like 'Additionally,' 'Furthermore,' or 'Moreover' to improve the flow of ideas.

The use of 'probably' is unnecessary when stating the age.

Remove 'probably' to make the statement more assertive: 'I got my school bag when I was 8 years old.'

Repetition of 'school bag' makes the narrative less engaging.

Use synonyms like 'backpack' or 'satchel' to add variety.

The phrase 'two straps hanging around it' is awkward.

Rephrase to 'with two straps attached for carrying.'

Incorrect use of 'tasted' instead of 'teased.'

Use 'teased' to correctly convey the intended meaning.

The sentence 'I used to force him to buy one all the time and he used to reject my offer.' is repetitive.

Combine and rephrase for clarity: 'I often begged him to buy one, but he always refused.'

The list of items lacks proper structure and clarity.

Use commas for better clarity and flow: 'I used to keep all my books, my geometry box, many pens, pencils, erasers, and sharpeners.'

The sentence 'Geometry box, many pens pencils, erasers, sharpeners in my school bag which they used to be used in school to write something or draw a sketch.' is fragmented and unclear.

Rephrase for clarity: 'These items were essential for writing and drawing at school.'

The phrase 'Bunten, Mr. Bean whatever' is unclear.

Clarify by stating: 'I admired bags with cartoon designs like Bunten or Mr. Bean.'

The sentence structure 'I used to make very dirty and my mom used to clean it for me all the time.' is awkward.

Rephrase for clarity: 'I often made it very dirty, and my mom had to clean it for me frequently.'

Repetition of words like 'excited' and 'school bag'.

Try to use synonyms or paraphrase to avoid repetition. For example, instead of saying 'excited' multiple times, you could use words like 'thrilled' or 'eager'.

Overuse of simple connectors like 'and' and 'so'.

Incorporate more varied cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', or 'Furthermore' to enhance the flow of your response.

Incorrect use of 'in' instead of 'into' when referring to putting things in the bag.

Use 'into' to indicate movement or placement inside something, such as 'I put my lunch into my school bag.'

Lack of descriptive vocabulary.

Include more descriptive words to make your response more vivid, such as 'colorful school bag', 'neatly packed books', or 'delicious lunch'.

Self-correction with 'I kept, I was very excited'.

Try to structure sentences clearly in your mind before speaking to avoid self-correction.

Lack of structured storytelling and coherence.

Start by describing your first memory of the bag, then explain its features and why it was special to you. Use cohesive devices like 'Firstly,' 'Additionally,' and 'Finally' to improve flow.

Repetitive use of 'you know' and 'it was.'

Avoid filler words like 'you know' and try to vary sentence structures. Instead of repeatedly saying 'it was,' use synonyms or descriptive phrases.

Incorrect use of tense and articles.

Ensure consistent use of past tense when describing past events. For example, 'it would come with me' should be 'it came with me.' Also, use articles correctly, such as 'a Disney princess pink color trolley bag' should be 'a Disney princess pink-colored trolley bag.'

Overuse of simple connectors and lack of topic-specific vocabulary.

Incorporate more advanced connectors like 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' and 'However.' Use descriptive vocabulary like 'mesmerizing,' 'vibrant,' or 'cherished' to enhance your narrative.

The use of 'which I had received' is incorrect. It should be 'that I received' to maintain consistency in tense.

Use 'that I received' instead of 'which I had received' to keep the tense consistent and correct.

The phrase 'including all the stationary items which is necessary' should use 'are' instead of 'is' for subject-verb agreement.

Revise to 'including all the stationary items which are necessary' to correct the subject-verb agreement.

Repetition of 'school bag' and 'used to' makes the response less engaging.

Try using synonyms or paraphrasing to avoid repetition. For example, 'my backpack' or 'my first bag'.

The sentence 'I want to show off my school bag' should be in the past tense.

Change 'want' to 'wanted' to maintain the past tense narrative.

The sentence 'For every children the first school bag will be memorable' has incorrect plural usage.

Use 'For every child, the first school bag is memorable' to correct the singular/plural error.

The phrase 'it will be a very good hobby for me' is unclear in this context.

Clarify the statement. Perhaps say 'it will remain a cherished memory for me'.

The use of 'Well, I talk about my school back of my first day of school' is incorrect. It should be 'Well, I am going to talk about my school bag from my first day of school.'

Use the correct tense and structure when introducing your topic. Start with 'I am going to talk about...' to clearly indicate what you are about to describe.

Repetitive use of 'good' and 'moment'.

Try to use synonyms or descriptive phrases to avoid repetition. For example, instead of 'good feeling,' you could say 'wonderful feeling' or 'joyful moment'.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement in 'they also happy to give me this bag'.

Ensure subject-verb agreement by saying 'they were also happy to give me this bag'.

Use of 'responsibility is start' and 'I make new friends there' is incorrect.

Use the correct tense and structure: 'responsibility started' and 'I made new friends there'.

Overuse of 'and'.

Use varied connectors like 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', or 'Additionally' to improve the flow of the narrative.

Inconsistent tense usage throughout the response.

Maintain consistent tense usage. For past events, use past tense consistently.

There is a lack of cohesive devices and structured storytelling, which makes the response somewhat incoherent.

Try using cohesive devices such as 'First of all,' 'Moreover,' and 'In addition to that,' to create a more structured and logical flow. Start by describing the past, how you felt then, and how it influenced you later.

Repetition of words and phrases, such as 'the bag' and 'the,' which affects the fluency and readability of the response.

Use synonyms or paraphrased expressions to avoid repetition. For example, instead of repeatedly saying 'the bag,' you can say 'my schoolbag' or 'this item.'

Incorrect use of tense, particularly in the phrase 'it has to it had two pockets.'

Ensure consistency in tense usage. In this context, past tense should be used, so it should be 'it had two pockets.'

Overuse of simple connectors like 'and' and 'also,' which affects sentence variety.

Incorporate a variety of connectors such as 'furthermore,' 'besides,' and 'therefore' to enhance sentence structure and variety.

The response lacks descriptive vocabulary and expressions.

Try to use more descriptive words and expressions such as 'vibrant blue,' 'cherished possession,' or 'ingenious design' to create a vivid picture.

The response begins with 'actually,' which is informal and may not be suitable for a formal test setting.

Start with a more structured introduction, such as 'While I don't recall my first school bag, I recently purchased a bag that I find noteworthy.'

Incorrect use of 'it have' instead of 'it has.'

Use 'it has' to ensure subject-verb agreement.

Repetition of the word 'approximate' and incorrect use of 'area' instead of 'capacity.'

Use 'approximately 35 liters in capacity' to convey the idea more clearly.

Use of 'so' in 'when I purchased this bag so my friends were amazed' is incorrect.

Replace 'so' with 'that,' as in 'when I purchased this bag, my friends were amazed.'

Repetition of 'like' and 'because' in the sentence about friends and the bag.

Streamline the sentence to avoid repetition, such as 'My friends were amazed at how pretty it was and expressed a desire to find a similar bag.'

Incorrect use of 'behind beside this.'

Use 'Moreover' or 'In addition' to link ideas more effectively.

Repetition of 'like' and 'so much' in relation to the mother's opinion.

Simplify to 'My mom liked it a lot,' to avoid redundancy.

Incorrect use of 'will be love' instead of 'will love.'

Use 'will love' for correct verb form.

Fragmented sentence at the end, 'because we can put the stickers on the bag and this is a gadget where you keep your.'

Complete the sentence for clarity, such as 'because we can personalize it with stickers, and it functions as a gadget holder for our devices.'

Repetition of the word 'school bag' multiple times.

Try using synonyms or rephrasing, such as 'backpack' or 'my first bag,' to avoid repetition.

Overuse of simple connectors like 'and' and 'but.'

Incorporate more varied connectors such as 'furthermore,' 'in addition,' or 'however' to improve flow.

Incorrect use of '11th grade until my graduation.'

Clarify that graduation usually refers to the end of high school, so it would be better to say 'until I completed 11th grade.'

Inconsistent use of tenses, such as 'I felt it was quite lightweight.'

Maintain consistent past tense throughout since you are describing a past experience. For example, 'I found it to be quite lightweight.'